How I live my day with one dream
and I can only evince it in vim
so I am to resonate two forms of happiness
a part with a smile, another with the sun-kissed body of a songstress
in them there live three more wishes
they make me behold the cumulonimbus
afraid not of the four-sided wind
when it blows my bones away from my skin
then comes the five-word-sentence toll
it says “the remains of my sunken soul”
does anybody realize that’s six words?
But hey, don’t want to act like grammar perverts
let’s make it last for seven unfeigned generations
with the betterment within adumbration
Why I English
1 month ago
23 comments:
it says “the remains of my sunken soul”
does anybody realize that’s six words?
serius aku x pasan 6 words kat situ.
dem, nak membahan untuk ayat ke-8 tapi english aku buruk. u're safe for now :p
n: u mean nak sambung ayat yg ke lapan? ala, sambung je. best thing about poetry, nobody really gives a damn about grammar:)
i'll pass -_-"
n: hehe:)
Sketchy!
A dumb ration? Hiks!
precious: hiks:)
bones can be blew? that made me wondered :D
No one will notice that the sentence contains six-words. till they read it, again and again then count it!
;)
ina: hehe:P
Had to use a dictionary for most of the words. :p
"grammar perverts" Hmm interesting term.
azie: terima kasih kerana sudi membaca:)
lalalala~~
najmie: cas RM57 dikenakan utk 'lalala' kat sini:P
buwekkk!!
taknak bayar.. lalalalalala~~
(^^,)
najmie: retarded ni..:P
everyone is retarded!.. :p
najmie: i guess so:P
I'm effin' bored.. got YM??..
(^^,)
najmie: 'youcannotreadthis':) but got to tell you, i hardly YM..not much of a chatter..it slows sown my downloads..hehe:P
najmie: *slows down*
I just noticed that I sent a comment yesterday using my private blog. hehe, but I need your answer please.
bones can be blew? They are hard, aren't they?
ina: the sentence "when it blows my bones away from my skin" is figurative. i was imagining the worse possible condition. but literally speaking, imagine the word 'blow' as strong as what a bomb can do. if that's the case, then they can be blown up and away:)
its a beautiful art of work i must say.. quite meaningful, deep and spontaneous.. good job..
nieya: thank you:)
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