ADUMBRATE

How I live my day with one dream
and I can only evince it in vim
so I am to resonate two forms of happiness
a part with a smile, another with the sun-kissed body of a songstress
in them there live three more wishes
they make me behold the cumulonimbus
afraid not of the four-sided wind
when it blows my bones away from my skin
then comes the five-word-sentence toll
it says “the remains of my sunken soul”
does anybody realize that’s six words?
But hey, don’t want to act like grammar perverts
let’s make it last for seven unfeigned generations
with the betterment within adumbration

23 comments:

nkecik July 19, 2009 at 1:59 AM  

it says “the remains of my sunken soul”
does anybody realize that’s six words?

serius aku x pasan 6 words kat situ.

dem, nak membahan untuk ayat ke-8 tapi english aku buruk. u're safe for now :p

Igniz July 19, 2009 at 2:04 AM  

n: u mean nak sambung ayat yg ke lapan? ala, sambung je. best thing about poetry, nobody really gives a damn about grammar:)

n July 19, 2009 at 2:34 AM  

i'll pass -_-"

Igniz July 19, 2009 at 3:21 AM  

n: hehe:)

Precious July 19, 2009 at 11:15 AM  

Sketchy!
A dumb ration? Hiks!

Igniz July 19, 2009 at 2:33 PM  

precious: hiks:)

Ina July 19, 2009 at 4:43 PM  

bones can be blew? that made me wondered :D

No one will notice that the sentence contains six-words. till they read it, again and again then count it!

;)

Igniz July 19, 2009 at 5:27 PM  

ina: hehe:P

Azie Nazri July 19, 2009 at 5:57 PM  

Had to use a dictionary for most of the words. :p

"grammar perverts" Hmm interesting term.

Igniz July 19, 2009 at 7:09 PM  

azie: terima kasih kerana sudi membaca:)

Just_najmiE July 19, 2009 at 7:14 PM  

lalalala~~

Igniz July 19, 2009 at 7:43 PM  

najmie: cas RM57 dikenakan utk 'lalala' kat sini:P

Just_najmiE July 19, 2009 at 9:02 PM  

buwekkk!!

taknak bayar.. lalalalalala~~
(^^,)

Igniz July 19, 2009 at 9:43 PM  

najmie: retarded ni..:P

Just_najmiE July 19, 2009 at 9:52 PM  

everyone is retarded!.. :p

Igniz July 19, 2009 at 10:55 PM  

najmie: i guess so:P

Just_najmiE July 19, 2009 at 11:53 PM  

I'm effin' bored.. got YM??..
(^^,)

Igniz July 20, 2009 at 1:21 AM  

najmie: 'youcannotreadthis':) but got to tell you, i hardly YM..not much of a chatter..it slows sown my downloads..hehe:P

Igniz July 20, 2009 at 1:21 AM  

najmie: *slows down*

Ina Bendtner July 20, 2009 at 2:30 PM  

I just noticed that I sent a comment yesterday using my private blog. hehe, but I need your answer please.

bones can be blew? They are hard, aren't they?

Igniz July 20, 2009 at 7:29 PM  

ina: the sentence "when it blows my bones away from my skin" is figurative. i was imagining the worse possible condition. but literally speaking, imagine the word 'blow' as strong as what a bomb can do. if that's the case, then they can be blown up and away:)

Nieya July 21, 2009 at 6:01 PM  

its a beautiful art of work i must say.. quite meaningful, deep and spontaneous.. good job..

Igniz July 21, 2009 at 8:07 PM  

nieya: thank you:)

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